And they spend so much time focusing on this part that they forget about just trying to get their ideas across clearly and effectively, and this leads to all sorts of problems in the writing. Or you might think that it takes years of English and humanities classes to become a good writer, and again, a lot of scientists don't have that. And read sources of professional good writing like magazines and novels, non-fiction books, not necessarily the scientific literature.

I pick up snippets, sentences, paragraphs from various things I read, sometimes my students' work, sometimes the scientific literature, and I'm often critiquing that writing. And it reads, adoptive cell transfer, immunotherapy is based on the ex vivo selection of tumor-reactive lymphocytes, and their activation and numerical expression before reinfusion to the autologous tumor-bearing host. The author writes, my professor friend told me that in his academic world, publish or perish is really true.

Here's an example that I pulled out of Cell, which is a top biology journal, with a high impact factor, something around 30. It reads, dysregulation of physiologic microRNA, miR, activity has been shown to play an important role in tumor initiation and progression, including gliomagenesis. Molecular species could be a lot of things, it doesn't give me a concrete picture of what the authors are talking about.

I think we have adequate scientific evidence to state that increased athletic activity lowers cardiovascular risk and blood pressure and improves. And i just want to acknowledge and thank Debra Biasca of the University of Colorado, Boulder who shared some writing examples and physics with me that appear in my slides. Here's another example, this is a perfectly good sentence it reads brain injury incidents shows two peak periods in almost all reports rates are the highest in young people and the elderly, that's fine.

Sometimes you have to be a little clever about it, but if you think about it carefully, you can usually find a way to put it in the positive. You can change that to the data confirm an association between vegetables and cancer. Finally, another thing that I want you to start paying attention to are needless prepositions.

So the next example reads, "Ultimately p53 guards not only against malignant transformation but also plays a role in developmental processes as diverse as aging, differentiation, and fertility." So, "An IQ test measures an individuals" and then we get, "abilities to perform functions that usually fall in the domains". So, "An IQ test measures an individual's verbal, reasoning, or motor and spatial capabilities."

So let's just point out why they don't work for mapping neural circuits and get rid of, for example, focused ion beam scanning electron microscopy. So because they have many intracellular features and this is an extracellular stain, in which we've just said in the previous sentence we don't need to repeat Briggman's team could not directly see, visualize the synapses. I go back to the author and say, for the revision, all those words that I've highlighted probably see if you can say a little bit more simply, or in passing, give a little definition for the readers, especially who aren't coming from neurology.