دوره Writing in the Sciences ، فصل 2 : strong, active verbs
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Unit 2 focuses on writing with strong, active verbs. Lessons include how to- write in the active voice; avoid turning verbs into nouns; choose strong verbs; and get to the main verb of a sentence quickly.
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I was editing this sentence for a student, "General dysfunction of the immune system at the leukocyte level is suggested by both animal and human studies". I wrote, "Both human and animal studies suggest that diabetics have general immune dysfunction at the leukocyte level". You'll find that it's also very tricky to write a method section in the active voice because you have to be quite creative to avoid starting every sentence with we.
Finally, another really important reason for you to use personal pronouns, is that when you put your name as an author on the paper, you are taking public responsibility for its content. So you should actively claim responsibility for the assertions in the text by using we or I. I've heard people argue that removing personal pronouns somehow lends objectivity to your paper. And, interestingly, people have been discussing the active versus passive voice for a long time in science.
So we're going to turn this one back into the active voice by saying, NASA's Hubble Space Telescope has taken the first visible-light snapshot of a planet circling another star. It reads, therefore, the hypothesis that the overall kinetics of a double transtibial amputee athlete and an able-bodied sprinter at the same level of performance are not different, was rejected. Remember that turning negative constructions into positives is another trick we learned last week, for making sentences more readable.
My altered version says, loud music came from speakers embedded in the walls, and the entire arena moved as the hungry crowd got to its feet. Loud music exploded from speakers embedded in the walls, and the entire arena shook as the hungry crowd leaped to its feet. So I rewrote it as, one study found that, of 930 adults with multiple sclerosis (MS) who were receiving care in one of two managed care settings or in a fee for service setting, only two-thirds of those needing to contact a neurologist for an MS-related problem in the prior six months had done so.
Notice that I got rid of that it should be emphasized that, the nots, the awkward phrasing, and I boiled it down to the main point, the possible explanation for the shift in proportions That the authors have observed. Important studies to examine the descriptive epidemiology of autism, including the prevalence and changes in the characteristics of the population over time, have begun. Sort of summarizing the rest of this sentence in short of form, which may lead to layer metabolic costs during maximum sprinting.
For example, if we say "Brain tumors are relatively rare compared with more common cancers such as those of the lung, breast, and prostate. And I think the authors realized that because they did not set the have been found to co-occur with diabetes off with commas so they knew it was essential material. Something I was editing, "Stroke incidence data are obtained from sources, which use the ICD classification systems."
It's actually fairly interesting when you hear me go through the demo edit, a couple of times I'll say something like I really like this sentence, or I really like how the author put this, I like this language. Just to give you a few examples before you watch this demo edit, the author wrote, antennas serve as electronic reigns, injecting small charges into the roach's neural tissue. So in test of the system, cockroaches fall in an S-shaped trajectory drawn on the laboratory floor and spent 81 seconds with 10% success rate to complete the route.
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